I am wondering what people thoughts are on the story and dialogue of the first chapter of my cyberpunk style comic. I’m not worried about the artwork because I know it’s bad but would like to see opinions on the story and if it would be enough to draw in the reader for more.

I finally finished the sketch pages (though I have done lineart for the first two) for the chapter 0 of this comic I’m working on and was wondering if anyone could read through through it and give me feedback and what is good and what could be done better.

(And before anyone asks, yes, I know the margin is big, it’s meant to be like that because I’m gonna print it later. The only reason it’s not cropped right now is because I’m not gonna bother cropping a sketch page. Like, I understand why I keep getting that critique, but it’s basically the only critique I get when I post here, and I just want someone to critique something else for once)

Flora and fauna will go on an adventure to save fauna’s fiancé Geo. This will be a long project in the making. So enjoy Giving me criticism advice.

Hello guys! Recently, I released 1st chapter of my comics, and soon I'll be releasing a 2nd one. And I need an overall feedback. Now there're 11 eps, they're short though

My comics is supernatural story with shapeshifter and vampire mc, and it's BL with very slow burn feelings. Setting is distopian future. Think of Ergo Proxy but with vampires and magic.

My request isn't about art in first place. It's not perfect, but most of my readers seem to like it. What I need is more feedback to answer myself a question "what actually may stop people from opening it? and what possibly can make people drop? and what should I do in order to find my readers - better cover, longer eps, change annotation, anything else?"

I will be super grateful and ready to do exchange feedback!

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/junk-city/list?title_no=1160653

My Comic

Nothing here was made by ai. The notes here began in 2022, for my now finished first comic book called the Charlestons.
It is in our world taking place in 1933, in a gangster populated town following the Charlestons, a family of four, you can read about them in the sort of mock pitch I have below: (fyi im not wanting to make this into a serious thing this is just a hobby and i wanted a platform i could share my ideas on):
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Everything from the papers:
Scared husband
Charlie
tough, overbearing, yet sweet wife
Liza

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He didn’t He connected with these kids because of school and then realized this after love half of the other time out and now here out wit the jerk guys….and so saved him for den he is but he doesn’t care because since he be so busy so busy active school he acure the something smaller & easier to face into for succumb.

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1920s- 1925 to
maybe she be specific loved him/ or for his money make it both???
also she has depression!
Had more from fairly vaudeville got bored
Poor father left after with fortune when he died forcing to not write anyone in his family will because he died of Alzheimer’s.
The men are friends this father knew
the mom dances to keep her girls inside as to not set them to experience the same grief as she has.
..
She goes out at night (or the next day (afternoon), but escapes out the window.)
She is found by the men is convinced to stay for a week at their place (+ meets the grandson)
Enjoys
Ends up missing mother.

Official “Lonely Aristocrat” Cheat Sheet”!❤️

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If liquor had never been made illegal, a lot more people would turn this way into a method for making money during the Great Depression

Created a portion called a hooverton with a nuclear explosion, creating an alternate world in the process (how did this happen?)

Was crime already a problem during the recession of 1920 & 21?

The boss is realistically portrayed as a crime boss from this era, but has the whole power of a town of _________ resting in the palm of his hand, making him the most feared out of any other mob boss the resides in the depths of the desolate town of mobster leaders.
(This is actually the bosses goal)
To gain complete control of the town

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(The mafia has an actual reason for hiring Charlie) (It has something to do with Charlie’s families history)
But why did Charlie take the Job? And why did TROPR need them?
(and the reason must be a simple one)
Charlie took the Job because Charlie could actually be with people whom he believes “understands” him, and the reason T.R.O.P.R needed him was because
and so his family could not have to split and believes he can fit in with.
\*(Referring to first the questions)
\*=(not original to paper)
not being able to get a job, caused Charlie to get hit harder than most other men, so since it’s easier for him to be depressed, his family did everything they could to be a good support to him, and because of this, Marta encourages her husband to get the highest job he could find, that job will eventually turn out to be a kidnapper at a secret underground trafficking ring, known as T.R.O.P.R.\*
Marta would also work along side her husband, so he wouldn’t panic on the job.

Because they mistook Charlie’s changing\*
They originally wanted to have Charlie due to his spontaneous attitude, but they also liked how Charlie might be able to use this trait to further intimidate others.

Proper mindset of a proper gangster, although Charlie would eventually be given the position of a kidnapper
His variety of emotions could push him to commit the kidnapping actions at a much faster rate
Charlie wanted to hide his condition, during his job interview, but after he snapped and started to pumble the boss as a test to prove it he is worthy for the job, the boss would then have found a new replacement kidnapper, and hired Charlie.

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The gangs would not be able to live with no leadership
They could want to own land
this is not an Original Idea.
Would the gangsters be able to get ahold of military weapons?
no
(because the military is funded) by the US government: Whom hates the

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Elliot switches between acting like an adult & acting like a kid
Elliot hit hard by sudden poverty
New villain they have to fight and he infuses the air with a s drug like mixture, with asbestos (While chasing villains)
Marta takes drugs
(Long Charlie)\*
Normal people getting into crazy short situations Charlie
\*This is referring to drawing Charlie

What are the conditions like and what are the people living there like?
The condition of the town is rather pleasant, with having citizens, that are mostly friendly when the real world is at dawn, but opposite when the town is at night
Something Different
The father of the French girl (a character who was said to compete in a beauty pageant with lulu at one time) was implied to have committed suicide, have to being apart of the trading with the gangsters).
Press ugly girls, even though lulu
The boss is a sort of a prison guard. ❤️ (sings 99 years, dead or alive)
Suave Playful Rough Jolly

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Dorothy (Voiced by Dorothy Lee)
French girl is named Jeannie
her love interest is voiced by Richard Crooks

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Captured the parents work for mob organization that kidnapped people force them to fight, and allow people to Get On the fight?\*
\*(this is not the full note the rest of the note features things on Ethan Frome that I’ve written down for English, and also a couple songs).

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❤️Reminders of Hope
\#6 Storytelling & Comic Support Themes:
It’s ok for your comic to feel important it’s your way of making sense of the world.
Hope exists quietly under your humor. It always does.
The humor may be absurd, but your meaning is deep. You mix them beautifully.
It’s not about proving anything - it’s about connecting with something real and keeping it alive.

Q?

A pretty simple dream sequence I made.

Does the scene feel mysterious, or is it too vague without context?

I'm hoping to get some feedback on my comic so that I can improve the format/comedy.

Honestly, all feedback is welcome, since I want to make it better!

Hello again!!!
It's been a while since I've posted about my manga one-shot I'm currently working on, so I think it's about time I update you guys on the progress I've made. 😊

Since it's a manga, read RIGHT TO LEFT, TOP TO BOTTOM, just so nobody gets confused.

If you guys could rate anything, (EXCEPT THE ART, i know it's terrible right now (especially the first like 10 pages). It's only rough thumbnails to know where stuff should go)please just tell me so. Dialogue, comedy, how interesting the characters are in the first half of this one-shot, etc.

For some context, the story takes place in Rural England. I'll try my best to make it more apparent in my later sketches, but it's not very noticeable since a lot of the backgrounds aren't even done (cuz im lazy).

I have my DMs open if you ever wanna get more involved in my journey, and as usual,
have a wonderful day my guys. ❤️❤️❤️

I'd love to hear any feedback on the intro scene to my story. I've tried to incorporate some of the feedback received here in the past already. Anything that comes to mind is highly appreciated! Thank you all in advance

Comic: "my fanboy, the villain!?"

I like when people who don’t know me/my comic take a look at my work and tell me if there’s anything that turns them off from reading or keeps them interested. I know everyone has their own tastes, but if you have time, please read at least a bit and let me know your thoughts!

Hoping for honest feedback on my comic strip! Are the characters interesting/funny? Is the text ok? Colors?

It’s a game called Casualties Unknown. In short: scientists created a new species to explore a planet for resources, but they couldn't care less if you die.

I’m creating a comic about one of those scientists who reached their breaking point and went to the planet—taking the place of that species—to die alone.

I don't know how to draw; everything is being done using the IbisPaint app on my phone. So, I’d appreciate feedback on the art, the story, and areas where I can improve.

I’ve been censoring some of the pages on GlobalComix and made them available only on Patreon alongside the ‘early release’ subscription, but since I’m new to writing a webcomic, obviously nobody cares to pay for it, which makes sense. But I’ve been thinking of maybe just re-uploading the chapters on GlobalComix uncensored? Or should I keep them as they are for now, as in, only available on Patreon in case somebody is willing to pay someday? The price I put on ‘em is like 3$ anyway, because I’m not confident enough to add anything more than that, and besides it’s only like a few pages for now. Eventually there will be more as I keep writing, but also, I’m like, who cares? What’s your advice? Should I just push through and keep it as is, or is it better as a new webcomic creator to show the public the whole project for free? I have no idea. Because honestly, before making money I obviously would rather find readers. But it also naturally progresses that way, don’t it?
(The censored pages are just the s xual scenes, which are allowed to be posted on GlobalComix without a problem anyway. It’s a supportive platform for adult creators, which is refreshing)

Comic link (GlobalComix)

Tell me what you think. This is a supernatural creature in my universe call Hounds. Their physical appearance is derived from their environment they live in. They are all also identified by the two blood tears from their eyes. They invaded the Human World and have been dominating. I wanted this cover to have that ethereal unknown feeling. Tell me what you think and how his design works and what doesn’t work. Thank you!